Monday, March 25, 2013
I've now received my draft of The Seven Noble Knights of Lara back from the editor. I chose her with the greatest of care, and it really paid off! She's given me the most perceptive comments I've received yet and has a well-reasoned, definite answer about my main concern: what to do with the beginning.
She didn't boss me around, but I made a decision based on all the pros and cons she presented, and I couldn't be happier. Sorry, husband, but the prologue you so love is going in the trash. That prologue sets the book off in the wrong direction while committing all kinds of other cardinal sins of writing (see below), so I'm relieved no more people have to read it! I need to rewrite it as Chapter I from the perspective of a main character. It's so eloquently simple, and it resolves the anxiety I was having because I wasn't sure I introduced the title seven knights early enough.
So, with all these new ideas percolating and tons of other responsibilities in the writing/editing arena, I'm going to be glued to a computer for the foreseeable future.
Some of the cardinal sins encountered in the prologue I'm tossing once and for all:
1. Head hopping. I tried for true omniscient, but it was head hopping.
2. The main point of view character gets killed within the first two pages (thus the need for head hopping).
3. It starts off with a bang before orienting the reader and giving her/him a reason to care what happens.
Don't commit these sins in your novel! If you have, stop right now and fix it! You'll do an editor and later readers a tremendous favor.